Something I might offer regards tense, which might help in perspective.
Example from the Clockwork Tiger post Verin made. it's split between two paragraphs. One ends and another picks up:
...Twenty tigers had been confiscated and relocated to be dismantled. The Priest thought that at that pace, the tigers would be cleared out of the city in no time. Today, Verin had chosen the Cathedral District for its density during the Day of the Dead to try and secure as many of the dangerous devices as he could.
The District is packed with a full array of ages and races...
The past tense is highlighted in the first portion. tigers had been confiscated, and Verin had chosen the Cathedral District. It gives the feeling as if the story happened sometime earlier, and falls in line with the rest of the thread.
Then, the perspective shifts to a present tense with the very next sentence. Also highlighted. This has a jarring effect for a reader (me anyway), as I feel like I've been seeing a story from afar, then pulled into the midst as if it were happening in that very moment.
By sticking with one tense throughout, you can then capture your showing with a bit more ease. In other words, do you show the action as if it's already happened: "Verin's hair bounced
like a buffalo on a basin-sized trampoline, flinging strands in every direction with every step he took
." Past Tense.
Or present tense: "Verin steps
, his hair flies
- flinging itself
into the air like a buffalo on a basin-sized trampoline." Present Tense.
For the action, I used a descriptive metaphor to create an image of what the hair looked like to me as Verin walked. It was quick, in the moment and with not too much thought. In other words, don't slam the image. It's late! LOL
Linking an image to an action creates a lasting visual inside of a readers mind, thus bringing it to life and making it important. Sometimes, I believe, telling is just fine - especially if it's not anything you require the reader to remember, or it's not too important to the story.
But if it's important, showing is the way to go. Consider your fabulous drawings of characters. How would you describe them to a blind person? How would you explain the sexiness of Shana in such a way that the person can see what you have drawn? Or the way Grathier holds his cigarette? You draw it in such a way that one can almost smell the smoke. Describe it the same way with words.
Writing is the same thing: drawing with words. Put your drawing skills to use in showing your characters in action, and you'll do very well.
And stick to one tense, and one voice in your works. Switching causes headaches. Me, anyway.
EDIT: Here is a terrific book I've read : Word Painting
Thomas Jarington & Co.